October 9, 2013 - Writing Body Paragraphs Cont.

I can write a proficient body paragraph

To be able to do this I must use my notes and other supports to construct body paragraphs that contain the following:

1. Topic sentence 
2. Textual Evidence - direct quotes
3. Comment #1 - Explains textual evidence 
4. Comment #2 - Explains importance and answers question "So what?"
5. Transition - sentence that blends two paragraphs

I will show this in my five paragraph essay

Mr. D's Example #2

Companies, like McDonalds, spread their product to become more powerful by targeting children with commercials, enticing them to become hooked on their food at an early age.  The earlier a company attracts a consumer, the longer they will have the customer.  McDonald’s creates life-long customers by attracting children and offering parents a cheap and convenient form of dinner. According to a 2010 study conducted at Yale University, “a whopping 40% of parents reported that their child asked to go to McDonald’s at least once a week, and 15% of preschoolers’ parents said they fielded such a request every day.” This shows that children, especially young children, like preschoolers, have been intentionally targeted by McDonald’s. This is important because it demonstrates how influential advertisements can be to children.  McDonald’s does more than just run commercials with kid friendly characters. They also use toys in their happy meals to attract children.  According to Eric Schlosser, author of Fast Food Nation, “nine out every ten American children between the ages of three and nine visit a McDonald’s once a month- as they and their parents are drawn by the seductive combination of playground facilities and give­away or special-edition toys, as well as the food.” This shows that McDonald’s knows that if they use strategies to attract children, they will have customers in the future. This is important because it shows that McDonald’s power is cyclical; by targeting children their power will continue to grow and as McDonald’s becomes more powerful, families will become weaker and people will become more unhealthy.